Taylor believes that money may be the root of all evil, but only if you're not honest about what it means to you. It has a wonderful power to bring people together as well as tear them apart and you can not escape from it. He also stated that money can never truly buy happiness, especially if you're unhappy to begin with. Furthermore, being rich does not make you smart - especially about things other than money. I completely agree with him and I would answer these the same way. Money is essential to life and as long as you don't let it over power you, everything will be just fine. Nothing in life is free and you have to work for whatever you want. This is why we have jobs to earn money so that we can support our family. Some people live paycheck to paycheck while others live without care. With that being said, it is important to know that greed can affect you no matter your social class. Lower class just wants to get their head above water. This leads to crimes such as drug dealing, robbery, and stealing. The people in the elite social class can feel the need for more money. To them, there will never be enough. This is where the schemes come into play. As a result, people tend to believe that the biggest crooks are the ones in suits and ties. In conclusion, money itself is not evil. It all depends on who you view money and what you do with it.
Many, many comma errors. To join independent clauses with a conjunction (for, and, but, so, nor, yet) you MUST use a comma. Review here: http://www.learnzillion.com enter code: LZ4966
You have a "stream-of-conciouness" style of writing. You flow from one thought to another with little sense of purpose, so that you end up revisiting an earlier thought after talking about something else.
Consider revising to add better organization, perhaps paragraph breaks to help readers follow your thoughts.
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1- Entry observes proper formatting (5/5 points) Name of LRJ prompt appears on the first line or Title of blog post, followed by the date of the LRJ assignment on the second line. Entry is between 250-500 words.
2- Entry is thoughtfully written, creative and relevant (7/10 points) Evidence is given that the prompt was carefully considered and the entry reflects thought and creativity. The response must in some way directly address the prompt – all parts of the prompt.
3- Entry observes proper grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc. (3/5 points) Although these LRJ entries are informal compositions, they should still read as if an intelligent person wrote them.
4- Entry is emailed to me and appears as part of your blog entry (5/5pts)
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